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1、优秀作文选1.MyhometownMyhometown—(________),whichisinthesoutheastof(________),(_______)Province,isaverybeautifultown.Letmetellyoumybeautifulhometown.Mygrandmothertellsme:morethanthirtyyearsago,myhometownwasjustasmallandpoortown,thepeopletheredidn'thaveenoughfoodorclo
2、thes，theyledahardlife.Butnow,peoplehavefoundalotofwaysofmakingmoney.Peopledon'tworryfoodorclothesanymore.Inthepast,thepeoplefromvillagegotintothestreetonfoot.Now,theycantakebusesordrivetheirowncarstogowork.Inolddays,theylivedintheiroldhouses,nowmostofthemhavenew
3、housesandhavecolorTVsets,cellphones,personalcomputersandsoon.People'slivingconditionhaveimprovedalot.Greatchangeshavetakenplaceinmyhometowninthepastthirtyyearsindeed.Wecanseetallbuildings,factories,schools,hospitalsandnewroadseverywhere.Ilovemyhometown.Imuststud
4、yhardtomakeitbuildmorebeautiful.点评：这是一篇优秀习作。作者首先介绍家乡的地理位置，是个美丽的地方。第二段采用对比和排比的手法，描写家乡的过去和现在，形成明显的对比，可以看出家乡变化之大。结尾段前后照应，提出希望，文章严谨，中心突出。2.ChangesinmyhometownManychangeshavetakenplaceinmyhometowninrecentyears.Itusedtobeabeautifulsmalltown.Therewasariverrunningaround
5、thehometown,wecouldseeallkindsoffishswimmingintheclearwater.Inmyhometownwecouldalsoseemanytreeshereandthere,theairwasveryfresh.Goodenvironmentmadeushappy.However,withthedevelopmentoftheindustry,lotsoftreeshavebeencutdown.Nowwecanseetallbuildingsandfactoriesevery
6、where.Airandwaterpollutionisbecomingmoreandmoreserious.Ilovemyhometownverymuch.Wemustdosomethingusefultostoppollutionandmakeourhometownevenmorebeautiful.点评：作者通过对家乡的变化，采用对比的手法，描写家乡过去是个环境优美的小镇，现在虽然是高楼林立、工厂遍布，但污染越来越严重，暗示人们重视。结尾一段紧扣主题，提出号召，控制污染，把家乡变得更加美丽。本文多种时态与句式的运
7、用，使得文章结构紧凑，自然。现在完成时Manychangeshavetakenplaceinmyhometowninrecentyears.“Therebe"句型的使用，被动语态运用lotsoftreeshavebeencutdown.比较级的使用Airandwaterpollutionisbecomingmoreandmoreserious等等。整篇文章写得较为成功，若能把家乡变化描写得详细些那更好了。3、Greatchangesinmyhometown Morethantwentyyearsago,myhomet
8、ownwasjustasmall,oldandpoortown.Mostofpeoplewerefarmers.Therewerefewfactories.Thepeopledidn’thaveenoughfoodtoeatandworeoldclothes.Theyhadahardlife. Greatchangeshavet
