安徽省巢湖市春晖中学2012届高考英语 考前冲刺精品讲义外教旁批写作外教旁批写作 (35).doc

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1、安徽省巢湖市春晖中学2012届高考英语考前冲刺精品讲义外教旁批写作（三十六）李民对电脑很感兴趣。上个月父母为他买了一台电脑。现在他已学会如何操作。他可以利用电脑做很多事。学生习作·外教批改LiMingisverymuchinterestedincomputers1.Tohisjoy，hisparentsboughthimoneon2forher3hisbirthdaylastweekandhecouldn’twaittolearn4howtooperateit.The5computerhaschangedLiMing’

2、slifea_lot6asitcanprocesses7informationquicklyandefficiently.Forexample，bysurfingtheInternet，hecanbeinformed8ofwhatishappeningintheworldanytime.Shoppingonlineiseasyandtime_saving9savestime.Insteadofgoingtoshops,hejustsitsinfrontofthescreenandplacesanorderforwhat

3、hewantstobuy.Awidechoiceofgoods10helpshimtomakeabetterpurchase.AlsoheoftendoesresearchontheInternetfortheinformationheneedsforhispaperschoolwork.Duringthehisleisuretime，computers11gamesandmovieshelpLiMingrelaxandbringhimfun12enjoyment.In_a_word13，thecomputerhelp

4、sLiMingalotinmanyways.,旁　批1．泛泛谈论一类事物时，可数名词应该用复数形式，不带冠词a或the。2．正确的用法是：buysomethingforsomeone。3．不要改变所谈论对象的性别。4．这个短语用得很好！5．这里特指那台电脑，是李民的父母为他买的那台。因此，需要用定冠词the。6．如果将alot换作dramatically，语气更强。7．can等情态动词之后必须接动词原形。8．这里被动态用得很好！9．原句表达不恰当，参见改写后的句子。10．单词goods指商品，一般为复数，所以应加s。1

5、1．本句中computer是名词作定语，不要用复数形式。12．正确的说法是havefun或sb.bebroughtenjoyment。13．这个说法比较老套，尽量不要用，可以用Inconclusion。WriteanEnglishcompositioninabout100to120words，accordingtothepointsgiveninChinese.1．爷爷送我电脑；2．决心学好电脑，答谢爷爷；3．有志成为电脑专家。______________________________________________

6、________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】Ihavegotacomputerofmyownatlast.Itisapresentfrommygrandfather.Heknowstheworldsituationclearly.Hesaysthatusingacomputerisamustinthemodern-2-用心爱心专心

7、world.WhenhelearnedthatIwasinterestedinthemachinebutIdidnothaveone,heimmediatelytoldmethathewouldoffermeone.Nowwiththemachineinfront,Ifeelgratefultomygrandfather.IpromisehimthatIwilldomybesttoacquiretheknowledgeandskillsothatIcanmakegooduseofit.Iwillnotonlylearn

8、howtooperatethecomputer,butalsomakeprogrammesonit.Ifpossible,IwilllearncomputerscienceintheuniversitysothatIwillbecomeacomputerspecialist.I’msuremygrandfatherwillbeve