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1、EssayWriting–InformationSecurityProblemsGrammaticalerrors（1）“therebe”Thereisanotherreportshowsthatmorethan...Therearemanypeoplereceivesimilarcalls…“with”and“as”WithmoreandmorepeoplebecomeinvolvedintheInternet...Aswesteppingintoanera…ProblemsGrammaticalerrors（2）AgreementPrepositionhaveinf

2、luenceinbeexposedinblameeachotheroninsomedegreeProblemsRun-onsentences(1)Whenusingparallelstructure,remembertoputan“and”infrontofthelastcomponent.ThevirusandwormsontheInternethavealsocausedmanylossessincetheydamagethecomputersystem,leakpersonalinformation,(and)evendamageourcomputers.Probl

3、emsRun-onsentences(2)OurgovernmentisworkinghardonimprovingthesafetyoftheInternet,butbugsarealwaysthere,sohackerscanalwaysfindwaystobreakthem.OurgovernmentisworkinghardonimprovingthesafetyoftheInternet,butbugsarealwaysthere,whichleavethesystemvulnerabletoattacksfromhackers.ProblemsRun-onse

4、ntences(3)Withoutdirectdamagestoourbodyorfinanceimmediately,wejustkeepconvincingourselvesthatit’snotabigdeal,everyonedoesthesamething,howcouldIbetheunfortunateone?Withoutdirectphysicalandfinancialdamage,wejustkeepconvincingourselvesthatitisnotabigdealandthatwemaynothappentobethoseunfortun

5、ateones.ProblemsInappropriateuseofcomplexsentenceThereexistsomeproblemsthatworryus.Thereexistsomeworrying/upsettingproblems.ArecentsurveyindicatesthatthenumberofChinesepeoplewhosurftheInternet,whichisboomingverydramaticallyhasreached338million.ArecentsurveyindicatesthatthenumberofChinesep

6、eoplewhosurftheInternetisboomingdramaticallyto(asmanyas)338million.ProblemsInappropriateuseofcomplexsentence(2)IDnumbersarestolenforapplicationofcreditcardstousethemoneythusmakingtheIDowner’slostofwealthandcreditsothatthebankmaylisthimintoblacklistandnolongerlendmoneytohim.IDnumberscouldb

7、estolenbyotherstoapplyforcreditcards,whichmaywellleadtothefinanciallossoftheownerandruinhis/hercreditrecord.Asaresult,thebankmaylisthim/herontheblacklistandnolongergranthim/heranyloans.ProblemsInappropriatewordchoice(1)bigfirm’ssecureinformation(secret/confidential)